You did very good job. In general, I liked your article. But, I would like to go a little bit into details, probably ones that are not likely accepted well by me.
I think, there is almost no link between hard work and too much homework in this article. I did understand the point which you are trying to emphasize: " Doing too much homework is a challenging/hard work, by only which you are expected to succeed. I understood it because I tried to work out the relationship between those 3 terms: hard work, too much homework and success, and I found it myself by my logical thinking. Whereas, the article should have reflected and directly delivered me to this point with appropriate words. This means I am still keeping my own opinion, depending on my way of thinking, because your article couldn't lead me to think in the way you do. I'm sorry if I seem sarcastic a bit, but I have to say that you have got very wide range of imagination which is seen in your beautiful comparisons(like "hard work is a gem"), but you have a lack of ability to connect your ideas. That's why while reading a reader finds lots of different and new ideas flowing and, perhaps, gets confused a bit.As a result, the reader may feel as if she/he is reading something information-based which includes separate new ideas that are likely not to have a general cohesion in meaning. I'd suggest that you do over the 5 initial parts of your article.Being creative minded and having good and broad imagination on everything, which means being able to connect things by comparing them is good, of course. But, if one considered a good article writer is not able to represent them in a good range of words and in an appropriate order so that readers don't get lost in new and new ideas, is of no value inspite of excellent, worth-to-know ideas one has in mind. Because words are important for articles since article writing is a great art of words.
